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Chapter 1
Waking Nightmares
The stinging golden light breaks through the darkness that was sleep and dreams, waking you abruptly. You are now John Egbert and you should be asleep, but for some reason you’re feeling unusually cold, like you were just taken from your warm and comfy bed. Rubbing your eyes, you clamber to your feet and look towards the wall of your cabin.
JOHN: three years, feels like foooooooorever and a half to me, I wonder what my friends are doing without us? heheh, probably having “TROLL/HUMAN SLOPPY MAKEOUTS”.
JOHN: better check on davesprite and jade, see if either of them want some company.
You take off your hood and scratch your head as you walk out the door of your cabin. Walking by a window you pause briefly, watching the streaks of light pass you. Unable to even begin guessing how fast you’re traveling you proceed down the corridor with your hands in your pockets. You then remember you’re travelling at the speed of light. Wow, you must be out of it. I mean really, why WOULDN’T you be travelling at the speed of light? Any slower would just be stupid. The ship isn’t so big as to get you lost or anything, at least not like when you first set foot on it and would never have found the mess-hall without Davesprite’s help. You smile at the thought of your friends and start running towards the living quarters. As you push open a set of double doors you see Jade talking to what appears to be the planets from your session. You move closer to hear what she’s saying and it appears that she’s holding LOLAR up and scolding it. You feel your PRANKSTER’S GAMBIT start to rise as you try to sneak up on her… and then she holds her finger up at you, and the jig is up. When is the jig NOT up with her these days? Kind of difficult to sneak up on someone who is fully aware of everything happening everywhere at all times.
JADE: just one moment!
JOHN: oops, sorry jade, i just wanted to ask what rose’s house did to make you so upset?
JADE: o: oh well why didnt you ask??
JADE: im not mad at LOLAR silly!! xD
JADE: im just yelling at davesprite who went rummaging around roses house like a creeper! >:\
JOHN: heheh he sure is creepy snooping around like that, but i think he just misses her.
JOHN: i miss our friends too. i hope we get to the new session soon, i want to hear all their stories and about all the experiences they had.
JADE: im sorry i dragged you on this journey john
JOHN: not to say we haven’t had any fun adventures of our own!!! besides, like i said, i wasn’t gonna leave you to go be with the others.
Jade let out a big sigh and began to smile. She captchalogged the planets and gave John a hug.
JADE: yes we have!! and i wouldnt have had them without you and davesprite
JADE: thank you for staying with me!!
JOHN: no problem, i couldnt let two of my best friends have this big ship to themselves
JOHN: i mean i couldnt let them be all alone!
JADE: i know what you mean john!
JADE: you must be hungry, im going to make …
Jade paused for a moment and looked out the porthole besides her. Noticing the fact that the outside couldn’t possibly represent what time it was, she pulled off the 1X FACEPALM COMBO.
JADE: guess i’ll just call it dinner because it looks like night out there!! xD
John’s stomach growled at the idea of food. John smiled back and Jade and shrugged.
JOHN: guess my stomach agrees with your idea, want me to get davesprite?
JADE: nah he said hes looking for something and he will be back soon
JOHN: ok, see you in the mess hall then?
JADE: you mean now?
Jade had warped John and herself into the mess-hall and begun to prepare some canned foods on the COOKALIZER. You decide to take a seat because she knows what she’s doing and you can’t even begin to attempt cooking anything besides those terrible cakes your father would make you choke down. When you settle down in a seat across from Jade your eyes get heavy. But you’re not tired at all! Despite all your attempts to stay awake your eyelids close and you fall fast asleep. Your face comes crashing down onto the table and Jade rushes over to wake you, but no one’s home.
JOHN: ugh… what hit me?
You groan in the darkness and rub your nose but for some reason the echo that you had grown accustomed to on the ship is not present. You know you’re not with Jade anymore. You try your best to navigate the darkness but no matter how hard you try you keep stumbling and falling on your face. You scramble to your feet again and notice now you’ve lost your glasses. You kneel down to the floor and start searching for your glasses in the darkness. All of this suddenly reminds you of a running gag from a cartoon you used to watch when you were back on Earth which featured a talking dog and a bunch of silly hippies.
JOHN: if only i had a talking dog here to help me find my darn glasses now
?? : Would a talking troll 8e enough? :::
JOHN: who’s there?
??: I’ll give you 8 guesses.
JOHN: can i buy a vowel?
??: What do you mean????????
JOHN: back on earth i used to watch a show where people would guess a word or phrase and they could buy vowels to create the word or phrase.
??: Or I could just get the lights
JOHN: sounds great!
The mysterious troll flips a light switch and your eyes quickly adjust to the brightness in the room, but without your glasses it might as well stay pitch black because you’re blind as a bat.
??: Here are your glasses, John :::
You receive your glasses and place them on your face so stylish. You should really get contact lenses, but there are more pressing matters at hand, like who is this mysterious troll?
JOHN: vriska? are you in my dreams again?
VRISKA: Yes, John I wanted to tell you that I’ll 8e spending much more time here.
JOHN: are you sleeping more now or something?
VRISKA: I guess you could say that about my situation……..
JOHN: what situation? is everything ok? did you tell talk to your friends about tavros yet?
VRISKA: I did, 8ut........ enough a8out that, how are things on your end?
JOHN: things are going great, but im more comfortable here than on that cold ship.
JOHN: davesprite and jade keep me company, but i miss talking to you all.
VRISKA: I miss talking to you too :::
VRISKA: But now we will 8e a8le to talk more often since I can visit your dreams.
JOHN: that is pretty sweet but how can you visit my dream bubbles again?
VRISKA: John, stop 8eing so silly, reaching god tier allows us to traverse dream 8u88les.
JOHN: oh right, we’re god tier.
You suddenly remember you’re god tier and as you do your clothes change into the outfit representing your role as the HEIR OF BREATH. Vriska’s white eyes grab your attention when you look back at her.
JOHN: hmm……..
JOHN: why are your eyes white?
VRISKA: It’s nothing, just some more god tieriness :::
VRISKA: Stop asking so many questions! Don’t you still owe me one of your human d8s?
JOHN: oh right! this is a perfect opportunity for us to go see one of my favorite movies together!
VRISKA: The ones with beat-up renegades?
JOHN: yeah! like nick cage in con air!
VRISKA: I can’t w8!!!!!!!!
Vriska grabs onto your hand and drags you out of the house in a fit of pure joy with her head full of muscular actors and scenes of action. You cannot help but be swept up in the heat of the moment and start to run with her.
VRISKA: I have no idea where I’m going!
JOHN: hmm the nearest cinema theater is…that-a-way!
You point towards the end of your street leading towards the local movie theater, along the streets you completely ignore how quiet the neighborhood is. The warm, comforting December sun beats down on John and Vriska’s head as you run down the street. Wait…“warm”, “comforting”? Something is wrong here… and you completely ignore me...
JOHN: did it get hotter all of a sudden?
VRISKA: It feels fine to me.
As it gets hotter you remove your hood and smile as the cool wind licks your face as you run. Your welcome!
JOHN: ahh much better, the cinema should be just up ahead!
VRISKA: Which house, all of them look the same……..
JOHN: the big one with all the posters over it.
VRISKA: So this is your movie building, beautiful ::
JOHN: yep! let me get the door for you
VRISKA: Okay?
Your eyes feel heavy again and you try even harder this time to focus on staying awake, not wanting to leave the comfort of this place and the company of a certain spidery troll friend of yours. But your will isn’t strong enough to strife with the sleepy feeling pulling your eyes shut. You drop to the ground on your face immediately after opening the door for Vriska, just as she was getting excited about the idea of a human d8, I mean date.
JOHN: uggggggggh my nose!
You wake up again, feeling a familiarly cold and chilly air against your face, accompanied by the smell of delicious home cooked food as well as uranium? But instead of chasing the appealing and confusing smell you sit on the edge of your… in fact, how did you get here? The memories start to piece together; you fell asleep in the mess-hall while Jade was cooking and… she must have placed you in bed.
JOHN: wow, jades pretty strong to carry me all the way to my bed. i wonder if she needs a hand cooking?
JOHN: maybe davesprites with her too, i wonder if he brought back anything.
You stand up only to fall back onto your bed and think about the dream you just had. You do this because I said so.
JOHN: wow, what a weird dream… too bad i didnt get to take Vriska to the movies, i really wanted to watch something with her. its been almost three years since i’ve watched any movies now that I think about it!
JADE: John, dinner!!
You get off your bed and walk to the mess-hall, your mind full of thoughts about your dream and how Vriska and her troll friends, as well as Rose and Dave are getting along. But you don’t have time to think about that now because you’re not John anymore, you are now Vriska and I’m fairly certain you’re a little upset your d8 was stolen from you.
VRISKA: siiiiiiiigh, I guess I’ll just have to w8 till he falls asleep again to get 8ack to our d8.
ARADIA: you have to move on, Vriska
VRISKA: Oh, h8y Aradia
ARADIA: it must be heartwarming to reunite with john but you can only imagine how hell feel when he meets up with our friends!
ARADIA: at least tell him the truth
ARADIA: you need to let him know youre not among the living anymore
VRISKA: You 8etter not tell him!!!!!!!!
ARADIA: i wont its your responsibility and if you really like this boy then you wont want to let him down now would you?
VRISKA: aaaaaaaargh I h8 it when your right.
ARADIA: i do too but you brought this on yourself.
You sigh and turn to walk away from Aradia but she places her hand on your shoulder and stops you for a second.
ARADIA: its nice to see you again, maybe we could meet again under better circumstances later.
VRISKA: Sounds nice 8ut there are only so many circumstances you can meet a ghost, you know that.
ARADIA: for now, till then, goodbye.
You leave John’s room and proceed to a more pleasant memory. It’s obvious you cannot handle being a ghost well. Ah, this was when John showed you that Con Air scene. While I’m sure you are enjoying yourself, watching rugged men do rugged things we have to get back to the plot at hand, which is being John and eating a freshly cooked meal in the Mess-hall. John, take a bite of Jade’s delicious glowing green hand prepared steak.
JOHN: blargh this is terrible!!!
JADE: im sorry john, i guess im not a very good cook
JADE: it seemed fine to me
Jade takes a large bite out of her green steak, you seriously have no idea how she finds this meal appealing, neither do I but you’re going to have to just put up with it for now, can’t be all that bad, take another bite.
JOHN: i can’t eat this…
JADE: im sorry :’(
JOHN: it’s not your fault!! it must have gone bad.
JOHN: whats the expiration date on this stuff???
JADE: but i don’t even know what date it is today!!
JOHN: it’s ok jade, we’ll just have to ask davesprite to bring something back from his trip to LOLAR, and maybe rose has food in her fridge?
JADE: i bet she has way better stuff then this canned goop!!
JOHN: hmm… i wonder if she would mind if we took her food.
JADE: something tells me she isnt going to be using it any time soon with it in my sylladex xD
JOHN: oh i guess so!
JADE: hey john
JOHN: yes?
JADE: if you dont mind me asking what were you dreaming about??
JOHN: vriska decided to meet me in my dream and before we got a chance to hang out i woke up.
JADE: … sounds fun!!
JADE: oops sounds like it would have been fun if you didnt wake up!!
JOHN: heheh yeah, i wonder what all the trolls all doing on their trip, probably nothing too serious if vriska has a chance to visit my dreams.
JADE: … i hope theyre having tons of fun!!
JADE: cant wait till we all meet up and they can tell us all about the trip
JOHN: that sounds like so much fun!
JADE: hey john, want to go explore the ship some more with me?
JOHN: hmm… i think i’m going to head to sleep soon, feeling tired again.
You don’t really feel tired but you want to get back to your dream and dream visitor before long. You don’t want to be accused of being a bad host in your dreams do you?
JADE: … oh ok. o:
JADE: hope you meet some more of our friends in your dream!!
JOHN: me too.
JADE: you can tell me all about it.
You laugh and exchange hugs with Jade as she proceeds to leave the mess-hall to explore the ship and have adventures on her own till davesprite gets back from LOLAR. But you again feel that tug on your mind as your consciousness begins to fade. You return to your room and plant your face onto your cot, just in time, your eyelids drop like rocks and you fall fast asleep. You preemptively rub your nose reminded of the previous times you fell asleep like this. The darkness you’re enveloped in doesn’t stay long as your surroundings become clearer. You are in a movie theater, your favorite one at that and there happens to be a reason you’re here, not just to watch rugged men handing out rabbits to daughters but you’re here to share watching rugged men handing out rabbits to daughters with another.
VRISKA: H8y John!
JOHN: hey vriska!
JOHN: …how did you know i would be sleeping now?
VRISKA: I have my w8ys, John, I have my w8ys :::
JOHN: heheheh okay! now what movie should we watch?
VRISKA: I’ve alw8ys want8d to see that one in particular with the 8unny where Mr.Cage is we8ring a tank top looking eeeeeeeespecially rugged.
JOHN: hmm, you must be talking about Con Air, but it hasn’t been in theaters for a while…
JOHN: I don’t think we can get…
You’re interrupted by Vriska handing you a pair of tickets and a smile as wide as a silly cat in a silly story about a girl and a rabbit. You both give your tickets to a man and he lets you into the theater where the movie is being shown. Despite the movie’s popularity the entire theater is empty, not a soul in sight. Vriska drags you to the middle of the seats and sits down besides you as the movie starts. You start to get relaxed in your seat when Vriska rests her head on your shoulder.
JOHN: don’t fall asleep now, the movie just started!
VRISKA: I’ve got my entire afterlife to sleep, John, I’m just g8tting comforta8le. :::
JOHN: … afterlife?
VRISKA: You know, when one of your muscular reneg8des says they’ll sleep when they’re dead?
JOHN: oh! hahahah, i see.
The movie goes along as great as most of your favorite movies go, this will surely be a day to remember. As you walk side by side out of the theater you notice Vriska is devouring the bag of popcorn you were sharing. You weren’t that hungry but maybe you should take your guest out to eat something for dinner? You know something besides concession food?
JOHN: you’re like the popcorn i see?
VRISKA: whats popcorn?
She doesn’t seem to know the name of the butter coated baked corn seeds which I find hilarious. You should tell her what it is.
JOHN: its buttered, baked corn seeds, and it’s what we eat when we’re watching movies like con air. it complements the movie and keeps us from getting hungry.
VRISKA: ……… Whats corn?
JOHN: uhh corn is…
VRISKA: Hahaha its ok John, I’m not that dum8. I know the 8asics of what you humans eat.
JOHN: hmm, on that note, want to go get more of what we humans eat when we’re hungry?
For the sake of your human meal schedules the sun retreats from view and the moon decides to pay a visit making the meal you would eat be dinner. You should definitely invite her to one of your human dinners.
JOHN: wow it’s been so long since i’ve seen the moon
VRISKA: Is that what that is? It’s so small and white.
JOHN: yep, just how i remember it!
JOHN: well… about now we humans eat dinner and since i would like to eat something besides cake for dinner lets go out to eat!!
VRISKA: 8ut, we’re already out?
JOHN: oops, i mean visit a restaurant.
VRISKA: …….. John
JOHN: yes?
VRISKA: Whats a restaurant?
You decide to just show her instead of taking the time out of the beautiful and… abrupt night. You take her to your favorite place … and then you started feeling sleepy again… must be past your bed time or something. You’re definitely not going to be able to keep your eyes open after those two hours of magic that was con air and popcorn, you drop like a rock and Vriska catches you like a wind sock catches… heir...
Chapter 2
The same familiar cabin and that same familiar chilly air greeting you as you open your eyes and take in the golden ceiling before you.
JOHN: siiiiiiiigh… i wanted to eat something besides glowing green steak and canned yuck…
You’re day didn’t go too bad, at least you got to spend time with Vriska and Nicolas Cage.
JOHN: im glad she enjoyed the movie as much as i did but theres so much more we have to do, maybe i could just go back to sleep now and spend more time with her?
No luck kiddo, I hear your dog+god+friend calling and you should too.
JADE: john, davesprites back!
That sounds pretty close, you should check out what davesprite brought back from Rose’s place.
JOHN: be right there jade!
You hop to your feet and race out the door of your cabin, leaving your dreams and certain spidery troll friend in bed awaiting your next drowsy slumber. The chill of the ship’s halls ignored you rush down the halls following the chatter from your two shipmate friends.
DAVESPRITE: hey bro whats happenin
JADE: davesprites back john!
JOHN: hey dave!
DAVESPRITE: caw caw
JOHN: hahahaha
JADE: he found some interesting things at roses house!!
JOHN: did you find any food?
You are still hungry after trying to choke down Jade’s irradiated steak, no matter how cool it looks, it does not taste good… you hope Davesprite brought back something delicious.
DAVESPRITE: i actually just wanted to spend some time enjoying the scenery
JOHN: riiiiiiiight, you were looking through her bookshelf again weren’t you?
DAVESPRITE: im surprised you dont trust me john arent you my friend?
JOHN: uhh yeah of course you’re my friend!
DAVESPRITE: good because i went snooping again and found some interesting journals to keep me entertained during our journey across the yard.
JOHN: …
JADE: hahahaha
JOHN: so is that a “no” on the food?
DAVESPRITE: oh, i guess whats in the journal isnt important. yeah she had a fridge full of food.
Jade/JOHN: well what happened to it?
DAVESPRITE: i took it? its not like shes going to be using it, or her journals any time soon. but if she asks i didnt take this.
Hurray Davesprite has returned with food and deposits the fairly large fridge on the ground besides him and cracks open a journal from under his arm and starts reading.
DAVESPRITE: you two can eat up as much as you want, im going to be busy working.
JOHN: heheheh you mean snooping right?
DAVESPRITE: im still upset that you dont trust me, it hurts john
JOHN: but… never mind
DAVESPRITE: exactly, later bud
You exchange fist bumps with Davesprite and he flies all cool like off to his cabin where you are sure he is doing plenty of snooping in Rose’s journal, he can’t trick you because you’re the trick master.
JADE: woof.
JOHN: …woof?
JADE: look at all that steak
JOHN: wow your right, she’s also got bottles of wine and glasses.
JADE: i dont think were old enough to be drinking god tier or not!!
JOHN: cmon jade lets at least try it.
JADE: fiiiine, but only one sip.
You pour two glasses of the thick red liquid and hand one of the glasses to Jade. You both swirl the liquid in the glasses and smell the glasses like you imagine wine drinkers doing.
JOHN: smells fine to me
JADE: if you say so :c
You both take a sip and look back at each other and then back at your glasses, I bet you’re pretty disgusted by how that tasted right?
JADE: hmm… maybe another sip?
JOHN: yeah, just to be sure about it.
Before you know it you’ve both finished off the glasses and are starting to pour more, your parents would be ashamed.
JADE: another glass for me please
JOHN: another round Then
Let’s leave these two to their fun and pay a visit to some equally interesting kids who are quite a deal away from the ones we’ve come to know and love. Deep in the dark reaches of the final frontier are the brave and strong… never mind… they’re just kids. You are now a certain crabby and supor deprived troll and it looks like you’re fed up with this shit.
KARKAT: IM FUCKING FED UP WITH YOU STRIDER, NOW YOU WILL GIVE ME THE GODDAMN CHALK!
DAVE: no way man its up to the mayor of can town
KARKAT: I DON’T GIVE TWO EXCEPTIONALLY DISPLEASINGLY SMELLING SHITS ABOUT THE MAYOR OF JACK SHIT!
DAVE: well its his town and if you wanna build somethin you gotta clear it with him
KARKAT: FINE,WE’LL PLAY IT YOUR WAY…
KARKAT: MAYOR OF CAN TOWN, CAN I PLEASE GET SOME GOGDAMN CHALK WITH WHICH TO MAKE MY OWN GODDAMN ADDITION TO YOUR TOWN ENTIRELY MADE OF USED AND/OR FULL CONTAINERS OF FUCKING DISGUSTING FOOD?
MAYOR: sounds alright to me, boy
KARKAT: IM NOT A BOY, IM A GODDAMN TROLL YOU ASS BACKWARDS, RAG WEARING, BLIND …
You trail on until Terezi hands you a stick of red chalk and smiles at you her grin extending from ear to ear. You calm down considerably and go off to the side of Cantown and start drawing up the outline of your movie theater. You decide to make this theater only play romantic comedy to educate the masses on all the quadrants of troll romance. Passively you assign one can the identity of John and draw a silly face on it with buckteeth and another can with a serious face and a sickle. After planning out your detailed and very well designed four floor theater of romantic comedy you act out John and you going to watch the movies and you get lost in this story for a couple hours.
TEREZI: K4RKL3S?
KARKAT: WHAT?
TEREZI: WH4T 4RE YOU DO1NG TH3R3? >
You hurl the two moirailcans off into the outskirts of Cantown where no one goes… surely they’ll become lost by nightfall, a rescue party should be sent out… but you have company.
KARKAT: NOTHING ANYMORE, WHAT BRINGS YOU TO THIS SIDE OF OUR FAIR SHITTY TOWN OF FOOD CONTAINERS?
TEREZI: JUST BOR3D, WH4T D1D YOU M4K3 TH3R3, 1T SM3LLS D3L1C1OUS!
KARKAT: IT’S A MOVIE THEATER YOU DUMBASS… WAIT…NO…NO…NO!
Terezi decides to get a better look at your movie theater and kneels down to lick it, there goes the entire fourth floor and the concession stands, now what are people supposed to eat while they watch romantic and humorous cinema?
KARKAT: …
A look of befuddlement and anger mixed with gut retching murderous rage washes over your face and its quite the sight to behold.
TEREZI: YOU OK K4RKL3S YOUR3 LOOK1NG K1ND4 W31RD >
KARKAT: I WORKED SO HARD ON THAT GODDAMN BUILDING…
TEREZI: S3R1OUSLY K4RK4T WH4T 1S TH4T LOOK ON YOUR F4CE >
Terezi wanting to get a better understanding of your obvious mood leans towards you and looks directly into your face, she’s really has no respect for personal space…
TEREZI: HMM
KARKAT: WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU WANT FROM ME YOU BLIN…
TEREZI: YOUR CH33KS SM3LL D3L1C1OUS K4RKL3S 1 GOTT4 G1V3 TH3M3 4 T4ST3!!! >:P
As if invading your personal space wasn’t enough she interrupts you by licking your cheek and throwing you off balance from surprise landing ontop of your multi-story romantic comedy movie theater, the cost of repairs would be at least 10 boondollars worth of chalk…and thanks to that unwanted surprise your blushing even harder.
KARKAT: AAAARGH!!!
TEREZI: YUM >:]
ROSE: Everyone get ready, there’s a dream bubble approaching fast and it looks familiar.
DAVE: is that john’s room
ROSE: It couldn’t be
KARKAT: MY FACE!!!
TEREZI: 1TS LOOK1NG 3V3N T4ST13R NOW.
KENAYA: Everyone, Please Relax. We Don’t Want To Frighten Whoever Is In There.
Dave: that’s not john…
KENAYA: Never Mind, It’s Vriska.
VRISKA: Hi ::
The lab is filled with segments of John’s room and John is nowhere to be seen, so you assume this isn’t John’s dream, in fact… why would his dream be all the way out here?
DAVE: isn’t she dead?
TEREZI: K1LL3D H3R MYS3LF
DAVE: hardcore
VRISKA: It was a cheap 8low!!!!!!!!
DAVE: why are you in john’s room though…
VRISKA: I’m not, see?
As soon as she said this her dream had changed from John’s room to her respite block.
DAVE: works for me
VRISKA: Congrats on getting god tier.
ROSE: Thank you.
DAVE: yeah same
KENAYA: I Have Business Elsewhere To Tend To, Goodbye Vriska.
VRISKA: 8ye…? ::
Kenaya leaves the lab and heads off to the teleportizer and leaves for “Elsewhere” to attend to her “Business” and Terezi decides to give you back your personal space by getting off of you.
TEREZI: SO… HOW 4R3 TH1NGS >
VRISKA: They’re …okay, I can’t complain
KARKAT: WELL THIS REUNION IS ALL TOUCHING AND SHIT, BUT I GOTTA WASH MY GODDAMN FACE BECAUSE OF SOME BLIND NOOK SUCKER GOT IT IN THEIR THINKPAN TO DRAG THEIR FILTHY TONGUE ALL OVER MY FACE.
In your rage you storm towards the teleportizer and mumble some obscenities under your breath and teleport to a more quiet area on the meteor. But the conflict hasn’t followed you. So you’re going to be someone different, someone with a nose for conflict and justice. You are now Terezi and are still involved in a conversation with a certain spidery troll and you should get back to that.
TEREZI: W3LL YOUR LOOK1NG GR34T FOR 4 D34D TROLL >:]
VRISKA: So are we even sis?
TEREZI: W…WH4T… >
VRISKA: I mean, are we even now? You took my arm, I took your eyes, I killed Tavros and Aradia, you killed me, and wouldn’t that make us even by now?
TEREZI: …
VRISKA: Terezi?
TEREZI: YOU C4LL3D M3 YOUR S1ST3R…4FT3R 4LL W3V3 B33N THROUGH?
VRISKA: You’re not mad are you? ::
TEREZI: Y…Y3S 1 4M! >:[
VRISKA: .::
TEREZI: 4T MYS3LF >:\
VRISKA: Why? You did what you had to do, couldn’t have done it 8etter myself
TEREZI: YOU DUMB4SS, DO YOU KNOW HOW MUCH 1 M1SS3D YOU?
VRISKA: You missed me????????
You wipe the warm tears off your cheek, even with your eyes damaged these tears still burn and ruin all your efforts to keep a straight face.
TEREZI: OF COURS3 1 M1SS3D MY FL4RP3 S1ST3R! >:]
You feel Vriska wrap her arms around you and hug you tight. The tears stop running down your cheek and you’re overcome by happiness, the scourge sisters are reunited.
DAVE: so touching, rose, do you want a hug?
ROSE: No, I’m good.
DAVE: it was worth a shot
ROSE: I think Karkat wants a hug, maybe you should provide him one?
DAVE: sounds cool, ill get right on that
It doesn’t look like Dave is going anywhere. Sorry Karkat that hug has been postponed.
TEREZI: SO WH4T M4D3 YOU N1C3 4G41N >
VRISKA: A friend of mine taught me how to 8e “human” and it’s pretty sweet, not as much fighting 8uuuuuuuut I’ll get used to it :::
DAVE: cough john cough
VRISKA: Shut up strider!!!!!!!!
DAVE: i knew john was into ghosts and stuff but troll ghosts, thats a new level for him
TEREZI: JOHN HUM4N T4UGHT YOU HOW TO B3 N1C3??? I GOTT4 GO TH4NK H1M!
VRISKA: Nononononononono you can’t speak to him a8out me yet.
TEREZI: WHY NOT >
DAVE: keeping secrets from john, i dig it
VRISKA: He doesn’t know I’m dead yet........
TEREZI: BUT 1TS OBV1OUS
DAVE: john was never really the sharpest knife in the drawer
VRISKA: Pro8a8ly 8ecause I lied to him about it
TEREZI: YOU H4V3NT CH4NG3D 4T 4LL, L14R >:[
VRISKA: It’s just; I don’t know how to tell him!
TEREZI: JUST T3LL H1M
DAVE: yeah hes a big boy now, especially if hes chasing after ghost chicks
ROSE: Something tells me he won’t take it well, He doesn’t handle death of loved ones well, especially after his father and my mother were killed
TEREZI: YOUR LUSUS W4S K1LL3D?
ROSE: Along with his and we were driven to confront Jack Noir haphazardly and we both were beaten in battle.
VRISKA: I don’t want to hurt him ::
ROSE: He will find out sooner or later, but I agree, it should be you who tells him.
DAVE: cmon hes a tough guy, hell probably get a kick outta you being a ghost.
VRISKA: I hope your right.
Over the intercom you hear Kanaya tell everyone to say their goodbyes to Vriska because they’ll be leaving her dream bubble soon. You exchange one more hug and grin the biggest unintentional grin you can muster, it looks excruciatingly painful.
DAVE: tell john i said sup
ROSE: Same from me too, Vriska.
TEREZI: M3 TH3RE!!! >:]
Just as you all gave Vriska your messages for John she and her dream fade from the lab and Karkat comes back in feeling a lot calmer and less red.
ROSE: Do it.
DAVE: fine…
KARKAT: WHAT THE FUCK ARE YOU TWO NOOKLICKERS TALKING ABOUT?
Dave rushes forward and surprises Karkat with a hug causing him to flip the fuck out.
KARKAT: WHAT IS WITH YOU GODDAMN PERSONAL SPACE BUBBLE BREAKING ASSHOLES TODAY!?
TEREZI: K4RKL3S P1L3 >:]
ROSE: Why not?
As you and your friends decide to ruin Karkat’s personal space and smother him in attention and hugs things are heating up elsewhere and we should check up on our ship riding friends and their alcoholic escapades.
Chapter 3
You are now the heir of breath and enjoying a few spirits with a good witch, best friend,, Jade.
JADE: my jelly feels like legs john xD
JOHN: woah me too I think, bluuuh where is the ground?
The ground being right beneath you still ever so elusive, you should take a second and think about how you got to this point where you’re playing hide and seek with the floor beneath you. Now let’s go back a few hours to when this first started.
JADE: “another glass for me please ”
JOHN: “another round then “
You pour yourself a glass of delicious red wine and do the same for Jade as you both sit on the floor of the mess hall enjoying each other’s company. You know you should lay off the alcohol but with no one around to tell you otherwise you continue quenching your thirst.
JADE: so john do you think rose ever tried her mothers drinks?
JOHN: she doesn’t seem to, I’ve never seen her try them and she doesn’t really talk about it.
JADE: what about dave?
JOHN: no clue
JADE: then were venturing where no friend has gone before!
JOHN: one small glass for us
JADE: one giant bottle for sburb kind!
JOHN: that reminds me, how much longer do you think it’ll be till we meet up with our friends?
JADE: should only be a little while longer I think
JOHN: what is a “little while” ?
JADE: its been three years now, so we should be there soon
JOHN: ah…
JADE: whats wrong?
JOHN: I have this bad feeling in my stomach…
JADE: nooo dont throw up
JOHN: not like that, I just feel like weird, like something bad is going to happen
JADE: at least were here together now,
JOHN: what about Davesprite, should we invite him to have fun with us?
JADE: hes probably busy with his nose buried in journals, and i don’t think davesprite can drink with us…
You take another sip of wine and rub your eyes, it’s getting harder to see with everything shaking, maybe you should lay off the alcohol… but you decide to drink another sip and keep going down this path because you’re enjoying yourself.
JOHN: I’ll go ask him if he’d want to anyway
Just as you rise to your feet and stumble a bit Jade tugs at your hood and gives you a sad, lonely look. You decide to sit back down and listen to her thoughts.
JADE: cmoon davesprite will be fine by himself for a bit, lets just talk?
JOHN: are you sure?
JADE: yeah!
JADE: when was the last time we talked alone for a while just the two of us, even lately you’ve been hanging out with all your friends in dreams and not had any time to hang here.
JOHN: your right! I have been sleeping a lot lately I guess we can hang together for now, sounds fun
JOHN: so what should we do for fun?
JADE: we could … hmm
JOHN: you are part dog right?
JADE: …yes
JOHN: would you like to…
JADE: …?
JOHN: play fetch?
JADE: …
JOHN: come on it’ll be fun!
JADE: fiiine
You reach into your pocket and pull out a ball you’ve been saving for such an occasion, if it were ever to arise you were given the opportunity to play fetch … I mean catch, with a close friend of yours.
JADE: woof, goddamnit …
JOHN: see, you’ll love playing fetch
JADE: just throw the ball john
You stand up again scrambling to your feet holding onto the wall for support and once you’ve got your balance you hold up the ball and Jade pants with her eyes fixed onto it.
JOHN: ready?
JADE: ball
JOHN: Jade?
JADE: just throw it
You take her advice and throw it down the mess hall and she disappears from your side and appears at the end of the hall with the ball in hand grinning at you.
JADE: too easy, far too easy
JOHN: holy crap Jade that was amazing.
JADE: throw it faster!
Jade , ball in hand appears next to you and she hands it to you grinning mischievously. You take a pitcher’s stance, almost fall over and hurl the ball as fast as you can down the hall and into the next room. But still to no avail Jade walks back into the mess hall bouncing the ball off the ground beaming with pride as she decides to jog back to you.
JADE: how about something a little more challenging.
You adjust your glasses and grin and let out a hearty chuckle, wind moving faster around you making your hood flow in the breeze of cool air.
JOHN: Jade.
JOHN: Deck. Now. .
JOHN: Bring the ball
JOHN: where doing it man
JOHN: where making this hapen
JADE: yay!
You both try your best to run for the door but you’ve had far too much to drink to move your legs quickly and end up tripping on your own feet like a clumsy fool and slam your face into the ground.
JADE: john!
JOHN: … ow…
JADE:are you alright?
You start to feel your consciousness slipping but you’re not tired at all… you must have hit your head harder than you think. Asleep again, this isn’t unusual for you.
JADE: john wake up!
Jade kneels down at John’s side and turns him over so that his head is resting on her lap.
JADE: …so familiar
There’s blood dripping from John’s nose, she takes the sleeve of her dress and wipes the blood from John’s face and then takes her hand and brushes John’s cheek softly.
JADE: …so very familiar
She adjusts John’s glasses and moves him and herself to John’s cabin and rests him on his bed.
JADE: …where have I seen this before?
John’s lips let out a sigh of comfort and Jade leans over him and looks at his face for quite some time.
JADE: …please wake up…
She holds her hand against his chest feeling his heartbeat against her fingers, she then holds her own hand against her chest and feels her own heartbeat quicken.
JADE: …
And almost instinctively Jade moves forward and kisses his lips softly. She keeps her lips against his for a good deal of time.
JADE… john…wake…up….
Jade yawns softly and slumps over John’s sleeping body falling fast asleep herself.
VRISKA: That’s not any 8etter!
The glow from the computer monitor illuminates an otherwise dim respitblock while Vriska curses herself for reasons unknown. John groans in pain from his nose and headache while he rests in the room behind Vriska.
JOHN: …whats not any better? Who are you talking to?
VRISKA: …Nothing John! You should 8e resting, I’ll 8e with you in a minute.
Under her breath she mumbles to herself and brings her fist down on her desktop verbally beating herself up.
VRISKA: How the fuck did I get myself into this mess?
Yes, how did you get yourself into the “mess” that you’re talking about, lets take a moment and see. Only a couple hours ago Vriska had taken to relaxing in her respitblock waiting for her matesprit to fall asleep so they could continue hanging out. Bored she took a seat in front of her computer and turned on trollian 2.0. It takes a moment to update itself to 3.0.
VRISKA: Feferi is online?
She takes a moment to pester a fellow sgrub player and much to her surprise she actually answers.
-arachnidsGrip [AG] began trolling cuttlefishCuller [CC]-
CC: GlubGlubGlub
AG: Hey
CC: VRISKA!
CC: I COMPL--ETLY FORGOT!
AG: …A8out?
CC:To welcome you to the afterlife! 38D
AG: …Thanks?
CC: Its so much fun )(ere!
AG: Really now?
CC: Y--ES! 38D
CC:I love meeting with all my friends w)(enever I want to and doing w)(atever we want to do, some of the memories aren’t as fun as others but I even got to meet with some of our friends that have yet to come join us in the afterlife.
AG: Our friends on the meteor?
CC: Y—EA)(!
CC: I even got to )(elp them out a bit and )(eal one of the exiles that was wounded.
AG: So you got to god tier?
CC: One of my alternative timeline selves did, I’m still a little fuzzy on the details
CC: I saw you visited them too
AG: How did you see me?
CC: Trollian 3.0 allows us to see past the scratc)(, Remember to t)(ank Sollux when you see one of )(im, )(es been so kind to keep us all moving forward and keeping us up to pace with our living friend’s s)(enanigans.
AG: Even the mage is here... You said Trollian can view past the scratch?!
CC: Y---ES! GlubGlubGlubGlub 3
AG: I’ll 8e 8ack soon, thanks for the chat
-arachnidsGrip [AG] ceased trolling cuttlefishCuller [CC]-
CC: Okay! I’ll talk to you later then
- cuttlefishCuller [CC] ceased trolling arachnidsGrip [AG]-
Vriska’s breath quickened with her heart as she opened the timeline view app on her Trollian client and her eyes fixed onto John’s timeline.
VRISKA: Relax, 8e cool a8out this, I can totally w8 a while longer…
She attempts to resist the urge to spy on John and she decides to roll on her choice. Reaching into her pocket she retrieves her fluorite octet and examines them.
VRISKA: “All the luck” what could go wrong?
A few clicks and keystrokes later she scrolls past the scratch that had previously blinded them from the future and views all the timelines, but more specifically; John’s. Vriska held her hand up to the screen and traced the line to where he is currently.
VRISKA: here goes nothing…
The screen that popped up showed her matesprite sitting on the floor drinking with his human friend Jade. As she scans the room she focuses on Jade and zooms in.
VRISKA: Even Jade went god tier…
A warm smile replaces her serious and blank facial expression
VRISKA: Suits her, she looks good in godtier gar8
To bide her time she watches John and Jade talk, she can’t hear what they’re saying but John and Jade’s smiling brings her happiness along with another feeling. Vriska puts her elbows on the desk and holds her head up staring at the two friends chat and smile together, she can’t help but feel jealousy come over her and she decides to take her eyes off the screen for a while.
VRISKA: …Sigh, when the fuck is John going to sleep?
She contemplates forcing him to sleep but decides against it when she looks back to see how much fun John and Jade are having throwing a small sphere around. Her boredom fades when she notices Jade leaving the hall and she focuses on John as hard as she can. Within moments John trips over his own feet from exhaustion and falls to the floor. Vriska lets out a triumphant “Yes!” and jumps to her feet and runs out of her room and into John’s dream.
JOHN: …Why does my face hurt again…?
VRISKA: Sorry John, I hope you’re not hurt too 8adly.
JOHN: Not really, I just have a terrible headache
VRISKA: You should lay down on your 8ed and rest, I’ll be 8ack with a glass of water!
JOHN: Thanks Vriska!
She jogs out of the room with her head filled with ideas on how they can spend their time together when she notices John has been moved from where he fell in the living world.
VRISKA: What the fuck?
JOHN: Everything alright?
VRISKA: Yeah, I’ll 8e there shortly. You should really rest your head, from the looks of it you hit it pretty hard.
JOHN: You’re right, don’t be gone too long though, I don’t want to be a bad host
VRISKA: Host?
Vriska ignores John’s last comment and tries to locate his sleeping body through Trollian and finds out Jade moved him to his bed. She lets out a sigh of relief and comments on how Jade is a good friend, probably his best friend. She whispers under her breath.
VRISKA: I have to make a point to visit Jade at some point, she must be really funny to 8e John’s closest friend.
No sooner than the words uttered by her mouth had left she immediately bites her lip and draws blood from the force of her bite.
VRISKA: WHAT IS SHE DOING?!
She covers her mouth as the blue blood drips onto her keyboard, Johns still sleeping soundly in his bed nursing his hangover and a tear rolls down Vriska’s cheek. She watches as Jade kisses him, she rubs her eyes as tears run down her face.
VRISKA: He never told me he had a m8sprite already…
VRISKA: Why would he lead me on like this?
As she watches Jade kiss John she grits her teeth and focuses all her energy into Jade. She squints her eyes and tears pool on the desk as she tries with all her might to stop Jade from claiming her matesprite. Before long Jade passes out on top of sleeping John and Vriska slumps back into her chair. Panting from the exertion of her mind powers she looks at the monitor and groans loudly.
VRISKA: That’s not any 8etter… now she’s l8ying on top of him
JOHN: …who’s laying on who?
VRISKA: Nothing John! I’ll 8e with you shortly
JOHN: alrighty then, i’m … take a nap…
Vriska pours a glass of water for John and heads back into John’s room with a mixed look of defeat and relief on her face.
VRISKA: John I got that wa…
Vriska drops the glass of water and nearly wakes up John again as she sees Jade stepping into the dream with them. She tries with all her might to stop herself from attacking Jade out of jealousy. Gritting her teeth she lets out a strained “Hi”
JADE: so youre vriska, how is the afterlife treating you?
Vriska’s cheeks blush bright blue and she looks at John.
VRISKA: How did you know?
JADE: there are few things that i dont know, vriska serket
VRISKA: …
JADE: so this is where john has been meeting with you, within his own dreams you visit him and deceive him into thinking youre still alive?
Vriska turns towards Jade and looks her in the eyes.
VRISKA: That’s not how it is, he’s my matesprite, and I’ll do anything to be with him,
JADE: but lying to him?!
Vriska looked down at John again and then back towards Jade and she moved toward her. Her hands clenched tight into fists.
JADE: you have to tell him the truth, you have to tell him that youre … dead…
With her fist she rubbed the tears from her eyes and looked back at John who was sitting up in his bed.
JOHN: …youre…dead?
JADE: oh no…
Vriska’s cheeks blushed blue and tears ran down them as she glared at John and Jade, she held up a hand to John and he fell fast asleep in his bed, falling as if he were weighed down by bags of sand. She then raised her glare to Jade.
JADE: wait!
Just as soon as Vriska had turned to Jade Aradia had flown into the dream and froze Vriska in time.
ARADIA: Take John and leave this place
JADE: …but…
ARADIA: Go!
Jade grabbed John and took him back into another dream till he awoke on his own, she’d have plenty to explain to him when he came to. As Jade and John absconded from the dream Aradia turned her attention towards Vriska and let her go momentarily.
ARADIA: I thought I told you to lay off John, you have no idea how many problems youre going to cause by pursuing him…
VRISKA: Why did you even interfere I did nothing to warrant such an attack!
ARADIA: You were about to attack Jade!
VRISKA: …No I wasn’t, I wanted to…
ARADIA: You obviously haven’t changed one bit, still the same destructive and manipulative Vriska as always.
VRISKA: You’re wrong!
Her words rang out like an explosion and Aradia felt the blast throughout her entire being. Regaining her footing she clenched her fist and glared at Vriska as if she was an enemy, much less a friend or fellow Sgrub player.
ARADIA: As if I could believe anything from your deceitful mouth
VRISKA: Then prepare to 8elieve something from my powerful hand
Vriska engages hero mode she throws her dice to the ground and Aradia froze them in time but the effect was not canceled. Within the sphere of warped and frozen time the dice irradiated a force even Aradia couldn’t contain. It seeped out and ignited the air around them, the concussive blast blowing both of the trolls backwards. Vriska holds her face in her hands and mutters into them.
VRISKA: I’m sorry, I don’t know what I was thinking, let’s just talk?
Aradia stays laying on the ground and Vriska rushes over to check on her, but as she moved forward a hand slapped her like a train across the face knocking her to the floor several feet away. Vriska noticed Aradia was not on the floor anymore but standing before her enraged.
VRISKA: Ok, I blew you up , and you slapped me, are we goo…
Before the words had a moment to leave her mouth Aradia’s hands were around her neck and she was then hurled through the wall of the dream and into one of Aradia’s dreams. Vriska skid across the dirt in front of what was once Aradia’s hive.
VRISKA: Okay, I get it, I’m sorry…
ARADIA: No, you’re not sorry enough…
As Vriska rose to her knee a fist connected with her face and knocked her backwards a dozen feet where she flipped mid air and landed on her feet.
VRISKA: I don’t want to fight you!
ARADIA: Not now you don’t, not when you don’t have anyone doing your dirty work!
Rust red tears flowed from Aradia’s cheeks and dripped onto the ground, Vriska then reached into her pocket and Aradia was at her side with her hand on Vriska’s arm. She then threw Vriska up into the air and subsequently the past as Aradia’s house came into existence and a terrible feeling of danger overwhelmed Vriska. She turned towards a source of light behind her and a wave of energy swept over her. Just as soon as it had happened it was over, Vriska fell to the ground beneath her and lay there next to the crater that was once Aradia’s hive.
ARADIA: Your own heartlessness leading to your defeat, how quaint…
Vriska slowly reached into her pocket as Aradia turned away and she rolled the dice onto the ground before her. Instantaneously her wounds had knitted and healed themselves miraculously and she now donned the garb of her ancestor Marquise Spinneret Mindfang. As she placed her hand on the ground within it she found Mindfang’s saber and once again she rose but with a look of determination she glared at her fellow Sgrub player.
VRISKA: I haven’t kicked the 8ucket yet 8itch
ARADIA: how you can think of something as obscene as buckets at a time like this is beyond me, but if you want another go at me, BRING IT SERKET I SHOULD HAVE FINISHED YOU ON LOMAT RATHER THEN LEAVING YOU TO BLEED!
These words were indeed unwise because as soon as they were voiced Vriska leapt forth and swung her sword at Aradia but the initial swing was stopped by her time freezing ability but it wasn’t enough. Aradia smiled and chuckled at her frozen kismesis but her smile slowly faded when she fell, her body weakened and she felt to her knees. She noticed her hands and abdomen bleeding and all she could say was….
ARADIA: How…?
VRISKA: …My terri8le luck…
Vriska said to Aradia as she retrieved her dice from the ground, blood still dripping from her blade it disappeared along with her outfit being replaced with that of a Thief of Light’s. Vriska let out a sigh and walked away from Aradia.
ARADIA: W…what are you waiting for, why did you stop?
VRISKA: No… that isn’t me, not anymore.
ARADIA: …
VRISKA: I won’t kill anyone I hold dear, not again…
Vriska wiped her face of tears and reached down to take her hand. Aradia took her offer of assistance and Vriska wrapped her arm over her shoulders and carried her to Feferi to tend to her wounds.
ARADIA: … Th…thank you…
VRISKA: You should really thank John.
Chapter 4
Rays of sunlight shine through the ocean and illuminate Aradia’s face while she lay resting on a mossy stone slab. From a nearby cave swam Feferi, she had a look of concern on her face as she moved towards Aradia.
FEFERI: You really did it this time 38(
VRISKA: I’m sorry…
FEFERI: Don’t apologize to me silly, you didn’t break all the bones in my arms and crack my ribs…sorry was that too muc)(?
VRISKA: …
FEFERI: …glub…glub…glub…
Vriska placed her hand on Aradia’s shoulder and a cobalt tear fell to Aradia’s cheek.
VRISKA: I didn’t want to hurt anyone…
Feferi placed her hand on Vriska’s and smiled. A purple glow radiated from her hand as Aradia’s broken bones mended and the bruises on her hands disappeared.
FEFERI: Trust me, S)(e’ll be fine now you go get some rest and we can c)(at later kay? Glubglubglub 3
VRISKA: …Sounds gr8…
SOLLUX1: Hey Fef, what are you up two?
FEFERI: )(—EY SOLLUX! 38D
Sollux drifted over to where Feferi floated and she wrapped her arms around his neck and hugged him tight enough to squeeze the life out of him, if he were living that is. Vriska examined his robe and hood, yes… even the mage went god tier.
VRISKA: Congrats on getting godtier Soll..
She was cut off by someone placing their hand on her shoulder from behind, as she spun around to see who it was Feferi giggled and glubbed to herself.
FEFERI: Vriska, Sollux2, Sollux2 Vriska.
She then swam over to Sollux2 and hugged him as well as dragging Sollux1 with her.
VRISKA: Why aren’t you godtier as well?
SOLLUX2: My tiimeliine wa2 a biit diifferent, le22 godtiier getting, m0re gettiing kiilled by terriible leader2hiip.
SOLLUX2: But yeah, II actually came here t0 kidnap my2elf f0r a while
SOLLUX1: IIs iit important?
SOLLUX2: Y0u bet y0ur a22 iit iis
FEFERI: I’ll come, glubglubglub, sounds like FUN! 38D
VRISKA: I’ll…
FEFERI: Can you please stay with Aradia for a little bit? Make sure s)(e’s comfortable?
VRISKA: Yeeeeeeeeah… sure
FEFERI: T)(ANKS SO MUC)(!
Feferi swam over to Vriska and gave her a big hug nearly crushing her in the embrace.
FEFERI: COM—E ON BOYS, L—ETS GO! 38D
She swam off, dragging both Solluxes with her. Vriska looked down at Aradia who was much calmer and in considerably less pain then before. Vriska rested her hand on Aradia’s and mumbled to herself before turning away.
VRISKA: …I’m sorry…so very sorry........
She had no intention of sticking around for long, for fear of what Aradia will do in response for Vriska hurting her so badly. She reached down and wiped her tear from Aradia’s face and stroked her cheek with her hand. She turned away moving into her own dream and decided to relax in her recuperacoon. She figured she could get in contact with John again soon and hopefully explain herself before he gets everything terribly wrong. Not too far off on a familiar meteor a group of friends kneel on a floor covered in the construction project of a century.
KARKAT: NO YOU GODDAMN NOOKSUCKING FUCKTARD, IT GOES OVER HERE!
DAVE: im telling you man you have to put the couch here, it totally ties the room together
KARKAT: STRIDER I’M TELLING YOU TO STEP OFF MY CAN-HOUSE, YOU DON’T NEED TO LIVE HERE; IN FACT I DON’T WANT YOUR SMELLY ASS ANYWHERE NEAR HERE!
DAVE: all im saying is your shitty house is ruining the resale value of my crib and i cant be having that happen on this block
ROSE: Fighting again?
DAVE: hes messing up my can-feng shui up in here
KANAYA: You’re Both So Immature... Let Me Have the Chalk.
KARKAT: IT’S MY FUCKING CHALK AND I’LL KEEP IT FOR AS LONG AS I WANT TO!
Kanaya glared at Karkat and pursed her eyebrows together and crossed her arms.
KARKAT: … F…FINE, YOU CAN HAVE THE DAMN CHALK IF IT’LL MAKE YOU FUCKING HAPPY
Karkat handed Kanaya the chalk and sat down steaming and ranting mentally while Kanaya knelt down to change the layout of his home to be more aesthetically pleasing.
KANAYA: Thank You Karkat.
KARKAT: YEAH… WHATEVER…
She handed Karkat the piece of chalk and Dave chuckled to himself.
DAVE: kanaya’s-boy
KARKAT: I WILL END YOUR SMUG RED LIFE YOU NOOKSUCKING FUCKASS, DO NOT TEMPT ME!
DAVE: hey man I just call em how I see em, and I can hear the “wha-pish” from here
Karkat’s cheeks flare bright red and he punches Dave in the arm and leaves
KARKAT: FUCK YOU I DON’T HAVE TO TAKE THIS
TEREZI: 1 134V3 FOR F1V3 M1NUT3S 4ND YOU’R3 41R34DY F1GHT1NG?
KARKAT: HE STARTED IT!
Dave examines the work Kanaya did on Karkat’s house and places his hand on his chin
DAVE: solid
TEREZI: HMM?
KARKAT: FUCK THIS I’M LEAVING
Karkat stomps through the extended neighborhoods of can-topia; can-town, can-city, can-ton, and can-ida till he reaches the teleportizer and takes his leave.
ROSE: Why do you two always have to fight?
DAVE: what and miss all this fun, you must be joking
ROSE: Something tells me he doesn’t enjoy it
DAVE: nah you must be listening to those tentacle rape monsters again and they’re telling you dirty lies
ROSE: …
DAVE: Fine, I’ll leave it be, but really, he looks like he has things on his mind.
In a section of the Meteor far away from the frustration of can-topia Karkat seeks his moirail for comfort. Its dark and damp in this part of the lab and Karkat slips on a horn and falls face first into a damp section of the floor.
KARKAT: FUCK MY NOSE!
GAMZEE: NaH iM gOoD bRo )
KARKAT: ARE YOU IMPLYING SOMETHING NOOKSUCKER BECAUSE I’LL BREAK YOUR SQUEAKY FUCKING HORN OFF IN YOUR ASS SO EVERY TIME I KICK IT YOU HONK SO LOUD THE WHOLE UNIVERSE CAN HEAR IT.
GAMZEE: MaN tHaT sOuNdS mOtHeRfUcKiN sWeEt
KARKAT: AARGH…
Gamzee steps out of the shadows and extends his hand to Karkat and as he takes his hand Gamzee lifts him up onto his feet.
GAMZEE: AlL bEtTeR, wIpE tHaT bLuE sHiT oFf Yo FaCe ThOuGh.
Karkat rubs his nose and then examines his hand, its dark but he can see the indigo blood running down his hand and arm dripping back onto the floor.
KARKAT: GAMZEE THAT’S FUCKIGN DISGUSTING, DON’T YOU EVER CLEAN THE FUCK UP IN HERE?
GAMZEE: SoRrY bRo (
KARKAT: NOW IM STEPPING IN …UGH…EQUIUS’S “B100 B100D”
GAMZEE: (
KARKAT: DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA HOW FUCKING UNSANITARY THAT SHIT IS, WE COULD ALL GET FUCKING INFECTED OR SOMETHING ROLLING AROUND IN THIS SHIT.
KARKAT: … UH… SORRY MAN, JUST FEELING STRESSED LATELY, SHIT HAS HIT THE FAN MORE THAN ONCE FOR ME AND I CAN’T SHAKE THE FEELING THAT SOMETHINGS MISSING.
GAMZEE: ItS aLl GoOd BrO, aLl Is FoRgIvEn. WaNnA sLaM bAcK a FaYgO wItH yO bRo?
He extends his hand to Karkat with a luke warm brightly colored Faygo bottle in it. Karkat cringes at the thought of even attempting to consume the questionable liquid, but he guesses he owes it to Gamzee and takes the bottle.
KARKAT: … WHEN THE FUCK DOES THIS SHIT EXPIRE GAMZEE?
GAMZEE: GoOd MiRaClEs NeVeR gO bAd MaN. hOnK hOnK )
Karkat opens the bottle and it hisses at him loudly, he looks back up at Gamzee making a drinking motion with his hands. Karkat puts the bottle up to his lips and tilts it back slightly.
GAMZEE: So BrO, wHaChA tHiNk?
KARKAT: …
GAMZEE: Yo MaN, aNyTrOlL hOmE?
Gamzee waved his hand infront of Karkat standing there still drinking Faygo, only a moment later the liquid poured from Karkat’s mouth and onto the floor.
GAMZEE: ThAtS nOt HoW yOu DrInK a FaYgO bRo. HeRe, LeT mE sHoW yA.
After taking the bottle from Karkat’s hand Gamzee takes a long swig of the colorful Faygo and wipes his mouth.
GAMZEE:MoThErFuCkIn ReFrEsHiNg AiNt It?
KARKAT: …
GAMZEE: BrO? (
Karkat stood there with his hand still in front of his face as if he was drinking, his eyes twitching and his mouth wide open. Gamzee lightly papped his friend on the cheek and he fell to the ground in a pile of horns, unconscious.
GAMZEE: ThAtS oK bRo, YoU cAn SleEp In My BeD tOnIgHt.
With that Gamzee walked back into the darkness and Karkat tossed and turned mumbling to himself as the horns honked with each movement. An hour or two later Kanaya’s voice rang through the halls of the lab; she seemed to be bothered by something.
KANAYA: Someone Please Locate Karkat For Me, This Is Extremely Important.
Rose walked over to Kanaya and placed a hand on her sholder.
ROSE: Whats wrong, did you see something?
KANAYA: Yes…
ROSE: What?
KANAYA: Karkat…
ROSE: …
Kanaya points at the radar within the navigation console in front of her and a video feed shows what appears to be Karkat wearing a dark grey robe and standing with dozens of other trolls. Kanaya looked worried, almost shaking, and then Rose embraced her to calm her down.
ROSE: I’m sure it’s one of Karkat’s doomed timeline selves, he was just with us. There’s no way Karkat could have died that quickly alone.
KANAYA: But That Despicable Gamzee Is Still Roaming Around Freely, Who Knows What He Would Do To Karkat.
ROSE: I thought he was Karkat’s friend or something?
KANAYA: …I Thought We Were All Friends, And Then We Started Murdering Each Other.
ROSE: …
Kanaya returned Rose’s hug and then turned to the intercom
KANAYA: Approaching Karkat’s Dream Bubble, Someone Please Find Karkat As Soon As Possible Thank You.
Dave turned his face towards the speaker and his normally cool demeanor changes quickly into a cold frown.
TEREZI: 3V3RY TH1NG 4LR1GHT?
DAVE: y…yeah…i’m not worried, why would you think such a whack thing like that?
TEREZI: 1 N3V3R S41D TH4T D4V3…
DAVE: … hey check out this skate park over here, its where humans show off their sick moves on skateboards and shit.
TEREZI: …
DAVE: …should we go look for karkat…?
TEREZI: Y3S.
The duo gets up from the recreational district of Can-topia and Terezi gives the mayor a hug then turns to leave with Dave to find Karkat.
Wayward Vagabond: Goodbye girl, good luck finding the crabby boy.
TEREZI: TH4NKS MR.M4YOR, HOP3FU11Y W3 WONT N33D LUCK.
Terezi takes Dave’s hand and they both step onto the teleportizer and teleport themselves to a deeper section of the lab where they follow Karkat’s chalk footprints down a hallway.
Kanaya broadcasts over the loudspeaker again but much calmer now.
KANAYA: Entering Karkat’s Dream Bubble, Has Anyone Found Him Yet?
TEREZI: H3Y D4V3 1 TH1NK 1 FOUND H1M!
DAVE: that aint “K4RKL3S” terezi…
TEREZI: H3 SM3LLS JUST L1K3 H1M
DAVE: that guy looks like business, lets make like a couple of trees and get the fuck outta here
He tries his best to pull Terezi’s hand as he attempts to get out of the red-eyed troll’s way. But she won’t take no for an answer and she goes to get a better look at this mysterious troll. She gets closer to him and looks up at him, and he down at her.
TEREZI: HMM…
She reaches up to him and tries to lick his face but from behind him an olive eyed troll throws Terezi backwards and grits her teeth at her. Dave moves towards the airborne troll and catches her before she hits the ground. Just as Dave pulls out his sword and Terezi her cane the red-eyed troll places his hand on the olive-eyed troll, “Don’t cause strife with our new friends my disciple, we should at least introduce ourselves first.” The Disciple nods and relaxes, glaring at the teal blooded troll standing before her.
TEREZI: WH4T D1D 1 DO?
DAVE: somethin tells me you almost stepped to her man, check out how hes got his arm all wrapped around her. all smooth and shit
The tall red-eyed troll looked straight at Dave and Terezi and said in a very calm manner, “I am known as The Signless. Born with the blood of a mutant non-existent to the current spectrum. This was my partner in life.” He looked down at the olive-eyed troll and she smiled back at him, then turning to the duo, “I suppose I am known as The Disciple. I keep an eye on my strong hearted but weak as a wiggler matesprit” she said ending with a chuckle. The Signless sighed and covered his face with his hand.
DAVE: im dave
TEREZI: 4LSO KNOWN 4S TH3 COOL K1D H3H3H3
DAVE: yeah, and sick nasty sword wielding badass
With that he shoulders his Royal De-ringer and pushes his sunglasses up. Terezi then steps forward still staring at The Signless’s face.
TEREZI: 1M T3R3Z1 4ND W3R3 LOOK1NG FOR OUR FR13ND K4RK4T, H4V3 YOU S33N H1M?
The signless stroked his chin and shrugged silently and turned to The Disciple, “Do you know of anyone by the name of Karkat?” She shook her head and turned back to Terezi, “Does he have any definable characteristics…?”
TEREZI: H3S K1ND4 CR488Y AND Y3LLS 4LOT
DAVE: and hes annoying as hell
The Disciple held her face in her hand and mumbled back to them, “I mean physical characteristics; eyes, hair, horn..”
TEREZI: OH Y34H K4RK4TS’s HORNS 4R3 JUST L1K3 H1S!
She points towards The Signless’s head and smiles and he touches his horns sticking through his hood.
TEREZI: Y3P, SM4LL 4ND NUBBY L1K3 TH4T!
DAVE: yeah they are pretty small
They both laughed at The Signless’s horns and he glared at the two of them, “They’re bigger than yours nooksucker…” he pointed at Dave’s head and Dave smiled back at him.
DAVE: im not even a troll dumbass, we aren’t born with stupid horns…
TEREZI: …YOU TH1NK MY HORNS 4R3 STUP1D?
DAVE: oh, no not yours uh… your horns are great, best damn horns ive ever fuckin seen in the whole galaxy
TEREZI: YOU B3T YOUR 4SS TH3Y 4R3
“So you’re looking for a troll that looks like me with …” The Signless was cut off by The Disciple grasping one of his horns with her hand “… Small nubby horns like these.” she said smiling playfully.
TEREZI: Y3P
DAVE: pretty much
“We’ll keep an eye out for your …”friend” … who I pity for having …”friends”… as good as you two.” The Signless said moving away from The Disciple’s hand and then grasping her hand with his own. “You’re no fun…” The Disciple said frowning.
DAVE: aiight lets make like a tree and whatever, terezi you comin?
TEREZI: Y34H… 1M COM1N…
She stood there watching The Signless and his partner move past them. Terezi kept watching even as they turned down another hallway arguing with each other. Dave stared up at the ceiling and groaned.
TEREZI: OH SORRY H3H, 1 COULDN’T H3LP MYS3LF. 1TS 4 R3D TH1NG
DAVE: does that ever stop being a “TH1NG”
TEREZI: YOUR C4P3 SM3LLS N1C3!
She gave Dave one of her best apologetic smiles and giggled nervously.
DAVE: yeah whatever lets go save karkat from the torture of being alone for five more minutes. at this rate he must have died of boredom and was reborn on the fifth minute praising his new rage religion. and everyone begins mass-rage at half past 6 in the morning and yells at each other till I give enough fucks to tell them “shut the hell up, i’m trying to sleep!”
The duo walked down the hallway they were traveling keeping a keen nose to the chalk footprints Karkat had left behind. Turning a corridor every so often and observing every door and passage they can, it carries on for what feels like hours. Eventually they came to a doorway containing nothing but stairs and darkness.
DAVE: i aint goin down there…
TEREZI: BUT D4V3 W3 H4V3 TO, K4N4Y4S 4LL WORR13D 4ND STUFF, W3LL JUST GR4B H1M 4ND L34V3.
DAVE: ok, but ladies first
TEREZI: … BUT 1M BL1ND 4ND C4NT S33 4NYTH1NG
Terezi smiled and waved her hand in front of her eyes. Dave groaned and looked down into the darkness and then turned back to Terezi. She smiled and nodded at the stairs and giggled to herself. Dave groaned again and started walking down the stairs descending into the pitch black room.
DAVE: this almost reminds me of something…
TEREZI: H3Y D4V3, LOOK OUT FOR TH4T BROK3N ST41R.
DAVE: i thought you were blind…
Just as Dave turned around to talk to Terezi he fell headfirst down the stairs cursing the stairs and the stairs’ mother and the stairs’ mother’s mother, poor stairs. Terezi then chased after him as he rolled and flipped down the stairs trying her best not to fall as well and met him at the bottom where he ate the floor like it was his dinner.
TEREZI: I W4RN3D YOU 4BOUT TH3 ST41RS BRO H3H3H3
DAVE: …they keep happening…
He pushes off the ground with his hands and stands up brushing off his shirt and cape and notices Terezi staring at him.
DAVE: …oh is karkat behind me, having one of your red things?
He looks behind him and all he sees is darkness and some metallic things on the ground.
DAVE: why are you looking at me like that, do i have something stuck in my teeth or something?
Dave picks at his teeth and then realizes his sunglasses are still on the floor. He bends over and picks them up and puts them back on his face.
DAVE: there, that’s better…
TEREZI: AWW, YOUR 3Y3S 4R3 SO R3D, C4N YOU L34V3 YOUR GL4SS3S OFF FOR 4 L1TTL3 LONG3R, PL34S3?
DAVE: … fine …its dark as shit anyway here
TEREZI: Y4Y!
DAVE: … so lets go check out that pile of scrap metal in the corner over there, maybe it’s a a clue to karkat’s whereabouts or some shit, i don’t know…
They moved hand in hand with Terezi following Dave towards the shining pile of horns with someone on it. Dave turned to Terezi and tapped her on the shoulder.
DAVE: hey terezi i think i found him, do your smell thing. make sure it’s the right troll this time…
DAVE: terezi you there…?
Her face directed towards the darkness beside them, her face turned pale and she pushed Dave towards the pile of horns where he fell making all them honk at once.
DAVE: what the hell was that for?
A flash of purple breezed by and the clang of metal on metal as it came crashing down onto the floor beside Terezi and the sound of bare feet against the steel floor quickly replaced it.
TEREZI: D4V3 RUN!
KARKAT: CAN A GOGDAMN TROLL GET SOME FUCKING SLEEP AROUND THIS CRAZY SHITHOLE OF A METEOR. I LEAVE AND COME ALL THE WAY DOWN HERE TO GET SOME SLEEP FOR ONCE AND WHAT HAPPENS? YOU TWO NOOKSUCKERS DECIDE TO BUG THE SHIT SO FAR OUT OF ME THAT IT HAS TO SEND A MOTHERFUCKING POSTCARD TO TELL ME WHERE THE FUCK IT IS!
DAVE: watch out man, theres a monster or some shit running around here
KARKAT: HES NOT A FUCKING MONSTER, HES MY FUCKING FRIEND. ENOUGH OF THIS BULLSHIT, GAMZEE TURN THE FUCKING LIGHTS ON.
GAMZEE: YOU MOTHERFUCKING GOT IT moi-motherfuckin-rail-bro.
The Lights turn on making everyone there wince due to them being without light for a while, all except Terezi and Gamzee. And he then glares at Dave who’s still sitting in a pile of horns with Karkat.
GAMZEE: THAT’S MY MOTHERFUCKING BED YOU HERESY SPEAKING MOTHERFUCKA, now get the fuck up and tell me why i shouldnt DEAD YOUR ASS RIGHT HERE AND NOW motherfucka, honk honk HONK...
KARKAT: DO I NEED TO PAP YOUR ASS AGAIN?
GAMZEE: NOT NOW BRO, theres a motherfuckin KISMESIS OF MINE THAT WANTS TO SIP FROM THE CAN OF ass whoopin. and im the only motherfuckin troll that can QUENCH HIS MOTHERFUCKIN THIRST!
DAVE: what are you losing your shit about, that video… really?
GAMZEE: you… MOTHERFUCKIN heretic, STEPPIN IN MY WORLD with your sick heresies AND MOTHERFUCKING RHETORIC!
DAVE: whatever man you know your religion is pretty weak
GAMZEE: MOTHERFUCKIN die motherfucka …HONK
The purple blooded troll glared at Dave and smirked, he knew this fight was over before he even started. Karkat stared at them both, his jaw agape.
KARKAT: …KISMESIS…THE FUCK…HIM?
His Freudian slip caught by Gamzee causing him to chuckle. He then lifted his hand and hurled his red club at Dave.
GAMZEE: LIKE A MOTHERFUCKIN musclebeast honk honk
It’s time to get it on, on like motherfucking donkykong. Dave furrowed his brow and put his sunglasses on not even flinching to the club flying towards him. Terezi tried to grab the club but missed and yelled for Dave to move but he just stood there. Smiling, he held his hand up and as soon as the club came in contact with his hand the club eroded away into dust and fell to the ground.
GAMZEE: MOTHERFUCKING IMPRESSIVE TRICK, heretic honk honk honk
DAVE: you haven’t seen anything yet, clown
Dave clenched his fist, his knuckles turn white as he smirks and disappears from sight.
GAMZEE: a motherfuckin DISSAPEARIN ACT, YOU MUST BE fuckin with me MOTHERFUCKA
The Knight of Time appeared above Gamzee and fell with his kick directed towards Gamzee’s head but when he came down Gamzee wasn’t in sight. The soft tapping of feet on steel was heard as it moved from one side of the room to the other. Dave was immediately reminded of his fights with bro. Dave heard the footsteps behind him and turned towards it with a roundhouse kick but met nothing but air. As he turned a grey skinned fist greeted his face with a displeasing crack but before he was knocked back Dave disappeared again. Dave reappeared behind Gamzee and his nose was bleeding and broken.
DAVE: we can’t have that mess fucking up such a boss face like mine…
He grabbed his nose and reverted it to the state it was in before Gamzee punched him
Gamzee rushed him only seen as a blur to a normal human’s eyes. Dave sidestepped without moving his feet evading his fist entirely and grabbed his arm. Gamzee brought his other fist into Dave’s side but he grabbed his fist with his free hand and lifted Gamzee into the air.
DAVE: taste the suplex bitch
He swung Gamzee over his head bringing him down to the floor but mid flight Gamzee got behind Dave and kicked off of him landing several feet back.
GAMZEE: motherfuckin impressive FOR A GODDAMN HERETIC MOTHERFUCKA honk.
Dave stood before him, smiled, and disappeared from view.
GAMZEE: ANOTHER MOTHERFUCKING DISAPPEARING ACT… so motherfuckin five minutes ago
Just as Gamzee had finished speaking Dave appeared behind him and tapped him on the shoulder. Gamzee turned around meeting Dave’s fist with his face and was knocked back into Dave again who delivered an uppercut to Gamzee’s jaw knocking him straight up.
DAVE: heads up “MOTHERFUCKA”
As Gamzee fell back down the Dave who grabbed his arm and threw him over shoulder towards himself waiting with the Unbroken Caledfwlch. Gamzee flew towards him and smiled. Taking out his Warhammer of Zillyhoo, he swung at Dave but he disappeared and appeared behind Gamzee as he landed. Gamzee turned throwing his hammer at Dave who stood before him. Just as he anticipated Dave flickered through the hammer and it kept flying towards his intended target, Terezi.
DAVE: oh no you don’t, i don’t appreciate silly shit being thrown at my girl, asshole
Unsheathing his Full Caledscratch and Scarlet Ribbitar he moves in front of Terezi. With a swing of his Ribbitar he deflected the warhammer and leapt towards Gamzee. Jumping through time and appearing in random locations he flew towards the enraged clown.
DAVE: youre… outta time
TEREZI: TH4T W4S….SO…B4D…H3H3H3H
GAMZEE: MOTHERFUCKA YOUR HERESY AINT APPRECIATED in my house a miracles HONK
As Dave reached Gamzee he swung his swords but the honking troll grabbed the blades with his bare hands and pulled Dave closer. Face to face they stood the half homicidal, half feral clown and the blade wielding god tier knight of time. Gamzee smiled and chuckled.
GAMZEE: honk honk…
DAVE: i don’t swing that way that, clown
GAMZEE: WELL YOURE SURE GONNA DIE THAT WAY MOTHERFUCKA
The enraged Subjugulator brings his forehead crashing down on Dave’s head with a sickening crack, stunning him shortly. He lifts Dave still holding the swords, Gamzee’s hands bleeding as the blades shift within his grasp. He then hurls Dave towards the wall behind him and keeps the Caledscratch in hand as he watches the dazed knight crash against the wall.
GAMZEE: CATCH motherfucka
He throws the Caledscratch at Dave and before he has a chance to react it pierces his abdomen and pins him to the wall. Just as Dave grabs the sword he flickers and it reverts back to the Broken Caledscratch and his wound disappears as well. A sigh of relief escapes Dave’s lips and he smirk at Gamzee who meets it with a grin of his own. Dave disappears for just a second and reappears with his hand in his pocket.
Gamzee: ANOTHER MOTHERFUCKING HERETIC magic trick again?
Dave chuckles and tosses metal dust towards Gamzee. The troll laughs as the particles coast towards him.
GAMZEE: is that the best YO SILLY FUCKING ASS can provide for my amusement?
Dave grinned again and the dust in the air regenerated back to their original state, becoming shuriken in mid flight. The throwing stars flew at Gamzee narrowly missing his neck and head as he weaved between them. Two shuriken grazed his arm and head but he didn’t even flinch. Dave stood, his back to the wall, he was astonished they all missed.
GAMZEE: IM GUESSIN THIS IS THE BEGINNING OF A beautiful kismesis ship we got goin on MOTHERFUCKA HONK HONK
DAVE: …
Gamzee wields Karkat’s Clawsickle and walks slowly towards Dave his equipped hand held high above his head.
KARKAT: NO NO NO NO NO NO NO, A THOUSAND SHITSTORMS WORTH OF FUCKING NO’S!
Everyone stops abruptly to look at Karkat as he proceeds to flip his shit and scold Gamzee for his actions.
KARKAT: ENOUGH OF THIS FUCKING HOOFBEASTSHIT, STOP FUCKING STRIDER AND CLEAN THIS CRAP UP… I MEAN STOP SCREWING AROUND WITH STRIDER… FUCK IT, I CAN’T GET ANY SLEEP WITH YOU ASSHOLES FIGHTING AND HURLING FUCKING METAL SHIT AROUND.
TEREZI: Y34H L3TS G3T TH3 H3LL OUTT4 H3R3…
GAMZEE: catch ya later bro. NEXT TIME HERETIC, KARKAT AINT GONNA BE AROUND TO SAVE YO ASS… you livin after our next fight WILL BE A MOTHERFUCKIN MIRACLE honk honk
DAVE: im lookin forward to another sick fight
TEREZI: 4S TOUCH1NG 4S TH1S STORY 1S, K4N4Y4 W4NTS K4RK4T NOW SO W3 GOTT4 GO, BY3!
She grabs onto Karkat’s arm and drags him up the stairs as fast as she can, as if she’s running from the room itself. Dave stands halfway up the stairs and looks back at Gamzee. Gamzee honks and the lights go off and the honks become distant. Dave turns and leaves the room closing the door behind him.
There are 155 people so far that have checked this thread, and I have a question for anyone who has/is/will read my story... Can they tell me if anythings wrong with it? anything too far out of character and the like?
Well. I mentioned on the fanfic site that it felt odd that Aradia was so concerned about Vriska attacking Jade/John, since we have some documented evidence in Homestuck of 'dying in dream bubbles' simply leading to the character waking up.
On the more technical side of things... I dunno. Your dialogue, mostly in this latest update feels sort of forced on occasion. Like... it you're trying so hard to get exactly how the character talks, so you move away from how people actually tend to talk I guess? I'm not really sure how to describe it, and it was fairly light as far as forced dialogue goes (by which I mean that I've read published authors who's dialogue hasn't flowed quite as well, so... grain of salt, I guess?)
Ultimately, I'm enjoying it, and that's what matters, right?
Well. I mentioned on the fanfic site that it felt odd that Aradia was so concerned about Vriska attacking Jade/John, since we have some documented evidence in Homestuck of 'dying in dream bubbles' simply leading to the character waking up.
On the more technical side of things... I dunno. Your dialogue, mostly in this latest update feels sort of forced on occasion. Like... it you're trying so hard to get exactly how the character talks, so you move away from how people actually tend to talk I guess? I'm not really sure how to describe it, and it was fairly light as far as forced dialogue goes (by which I mean that I've read published authors who's dialogue hasn't flowed quite as well, so... grain of salt, I guess?)
Ultimately, I'm enjoying it, and that's what matters, right?
What do you mean how people actually tend to talk? emotion wise or flowing from action and conversation?
As for the Vriska attacking Jade/John, Its not about her physically attacking them, its about her having control over John's life by putting him to sleep and becoming a "necessary" part of his life, eventually leading to his dependence and unreliability when it comes time to face the endgame goal.
Aradia said Vriska in her first appearance in Waking Nightmares that John needs to be told that shes dead, this is so her death isn't a crippling surprise down the road.
and can I get an example of inhuman tendencies when talking please? ^^;; I want to fix that before it becomes too troublesome.
VRISKA: Why did you even interfere I did nothing to warrant such an attack!
ARADIA: You were about to attack Jade!
VRISKA: …No I wasn't, I wanted to…
ARADIA: You obviously haven't changed one bit, still the same destructive and manipulative Vriska as always.
That'd be what I was referring to on the attacking Jade/John bit. And um. I don't know that it was anything specific, just a general stiffness to the conversation now and again. I'll give it a reread later to see if I can point out what specifically gave me that feeling.
That'd be what I was referring to on the attacking Jade/John bit. And um. I don't know that it was anything specific, just a general stiffness to the conversation now and again. I'll give it a reread later to see if I can point out what specifically gave me that feeling.
That specific part was supposed to feel awkward if thats what your getting at, but it does seem a bit forced from Vriska's "warrant" and Aradia's jump into saying she hasn't changed at all, but You can see where her emotion is coming from. being that the two of them fighting has history to it.
No, I meant that's the conversation where I got the 'Aradia was attacking Vriska for attacking John and Jade' bit. Though that conversation might have had some of it, like I said, I'll need to get around to rereading it to point stuff out. Probably later tonight.
No, I meant that's the conversation where I got the 'Aradia was attacking Vriska for attacking John and Jade' bit. Though that conversation might have had some of it, like I said, I'll need to get around to rereading it to point stuff out. Probably later tonight.
I gotta get chapter 4 completely finished... but I'm seriously at a lack of creative energy at the moment...
Whats your opinion on the last chapter's fight scene?
Im facing some negative commentary from readers due to Dave's time shenanigans
It didn't seem to fit entirely with what we've seen him be capable of as the Knight of Time thus far. Of course, we haven't seen him fight since he hit God Tier either. Dunno what commentary you'd be getting on it besides that.
Edit: Okay finished skimming back through the chapters. The 'stiffness' in the dialogue that I was talking about was mostly from my impression of Vriska and Aradia's conversation, I think. Little bit on the fourth chapter, but mostly that section.
It didn't seem to fit entirely with what we've seen him be capable of as the Knight of Time thus far. Of course, we haven't seen him fight since he hit God Tier either. Dunno what commentary you'd be getting on it besides that.
Edit: Okay finished skimming back through the chapters. The 'stiffness' in the dialogue that I was talking about was mostly from my impression of Vriska and Aradia's conversation, I think. Little bit on the fourth chapter, but mostly that section.
Really? I've been told my hints at Black-Rom were noticed. I'll see about trying to prevent that "stiffness" in future conversations.
Oh, I got that Aradia was angry at Vriska and such. I don't know how to explain it, honestly. Its just sort of a general impression and its hard to pick at specific details to help show what I mean, I think. :\ Sorry about providing such unconstructive criticism.
Oh, I got that Aradia was angry at Vriska and such. I don't know how to explain it, honestly. Its just sort of a general impression and its hard to pick at specific details to help show what I mean, I think. :\ Sorry about providing such unconstructive criticism.
Its fine, better then the 380 some that hit my fanfic.net post and never leave reviews e_e
To be fair, I'm like that with most stuff I read. But I figured I'd comment since you specifically asked for it. And now you've practically got me in a dialogue here. :P
But yes, keep writing. I do think its pretty good even with my admittedly minor gripes up above.
To be fair, I'm like that with most stuff I read. But I figured I'd comment since you specifically asked for it. And now you've practically got me in a dialogue here. :P
But yes, keep writing. I do think its pretty good even with my admittedly minor gripes up above.
You may not be pleased with my endgame goal for the story, as I try to write the characters into maturity... If Hussie beats me to the punch of character maturity I'll change the story to "AU" and keep writing but I'm trying my damndest to keep it "canon" as possible while still having creativity and remaining interesting.
But for those who wanted me to get back to the point of a red-rom fanfic chapter 4 continued won't be getting back to Vriska and John but instead will have more to do with Karkat to say the very least without spoiling much.
EDIT: It may take me a bit longer to write this part of the chapter... because I'm going to do something in it I probably shouldn't. every so often i'll get about 2k words down and scrap the whole damn thing because it doesn't sound right... so I decided to write on paper for the remainder till I get about 5~6k words I am pleased with and can't just delete all...
almost...done...with the rest...of chapter 4... changed the writing style entirely... those who disliked the separation between dialogue and narration will love this... the feeling and emotion comes off like fucking silk... I should have the whole damn thing finished and edited soon... then I'm taking a break and writing a John/Jade shipper's tale as a sort of apology for what I did in the third chapter...
EDIT: this chapter, chapter 4 in total, should be longer then the other 3 chapters combined... with chapter 4-continued being about 6000+ words.
NOTHER EDIT: I apologize if it comes off rushed nearing the end... I didn't want to make this fanfic entirely about a side story...I still have to get back to the main plot...
Originally Posted by Nephirin
Well. I mentioned on the fanfic site that it felt odd that Aradia was so concerned about Vriska attacking Jade/John, since we have some documented evidence in Homestuck of 'dying in dream bubbles' simply leading to the character waking up.
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