NIGHTFALL: Post-sburb fancomic

[TheNeonWerewolf]

Alright guys,

I might not be able to update for a few days. I am going to be gone most of the day for an Easter thing, and the next update is a little time consuming (Not a flash, sorry). Depending on how everything goes, I might have an update as early as tonight, or as late as tuesday.

And thank you for all the new readers and people promoting the comic! I really appreciate it!


So until I get back, you can watch this totally amazing Vriska tribute video: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rA26l5P-c9I THE SONG FITS HER SO PERFECTLY!!!!!!!!

[Romanji]

Looking forward to the next update

[Lingering Sentiment]

The John/Vriska community is at least as big as Vriska.

Oh ho ho ho! Seems someone else remembers that whole fad with "Fat Vriska".

*3* And yes, we're quite proud of you Neon!

Personally I think Rose's response was in character. I'm sure there's a reason she was so unsubtle.

[Stormspirit]

Oh ho ho ho! Seems someone else remembers that whole fad with "Fat Vriska".

*3* And yes, we're quite proud of you Neon!

Personally I think Rose's response was in character. I'm sure there's a reason she was so unsubtle.

It's not hard to remember it while it's still in effect, though. I mean, Fat Vriska jokes cover at least 60% of the Vriska Quarantine. Which is why we need it. Because they are at least as massive as Vriska is.

[SwariSexualPosition]

Loving the story so far Neon, but Rose was a bit forward there in my honest opinion ^^; and nice group of followers you've generated, I had no idea the John/Vriska community was so big.

Oh...

Yes...

John/Vriska...

Right...

*tucks John/Rose banner in back pocket*

[Lingering Sentiment]

It's not hard to remember it while it's still in effect, though. I mean, Fat Vriska jokes cover at least 60% of the Vriska Quarantine. Which is why we need it. Because they are at least as massive as Vriska is.

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That reminds me, I need to finish reading Problem Sleuth.

[Romanji]

While Hussie and Neon take breaks from making pages I need your opinions shippers :U
read this and tell me what you think http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7984283/1/Waking_Nightmares

[Dastardly bananas]

While Hussie and Neon take breaks from making pages I need your opinions shippers :U
read this and tell me what you think http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7984283/1/Waking_Nightmares

John Vriska shipper approval. +1 reader!

Seriously though, it's good. I like it!

[Nephirin]

While Hussie and Neon take breaks from making pages I need your opinions shippers :U
read this and tell me what you think http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7984283/1/Waking_Nightmares

I think I require another chapter.

[Romanji]

I'm currently writing chapter 4, and I should update by tonight or tomorrow, Normally I do 1 chapter a week but to compete with hussie I have to work fast before my fanfic becomes more uncannon

EDIT: And please leave reviews xD
Not saying I like praise and whatnot, I need to know where I go wrong with things so I can fix it now before I kick things into a higher gear.

[FowlJ]

While Hussie and Neon take breaks from making pages I need your opinions shippers :U
read this and tell me what you think http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7984283/1/Waking_Nightmares

Haven't had time to have a good look at it just yet, but to give my before reading impression I'll say that I am not so much a fan of the formatting. Standard paragraph format is generally the way to go whatever your story. Actual pesterlogs are a different case, of course, but you seem to have it set up that way for just regular dialog.

Again, haven't had time to really read just yet, just felt like mentioning this.

[Romanji]

I have it set for separation of Narration, Personal narration(as if I were saying it), Dialogue and pesterlogs all different styles.
Chapter 3+ it changes and becomes more mature as readers get into the idea. I didn't want to smack people in the face with a brick made entirely of drama and text walls as I relinquish my inner sanctum of creativity.
But yes chapters 3,4+ will get purrgressively darker and more mature. That pun was necessary

EDIT: ch3 edited and ch4 nearly finished

[obolisk0430]

That's a pretty good fic compared to most of the stuff I've seen on that website.

[Souleater17]

That's a pretty good fic compared to most of the stuff I've seen on that website.

Then you haven't looked at many.
There's a lot of great ones out there.
Great fic, Romanji.

[User 18]

I have it set for separation of Narration, Personal narration(as if I were saying it), Dialogue and pesterlogs all different styles.
Chapter 3+ it changes and becomes more mature as readers get into the idea. I didn't want to smack people in the face with a brick made entirely of drama and text walls as I relinquish my inner sanctum of creativity.
But yes chapters 3,4+ will get purrgressively darker and more mature. That pun was necessary

EDIT: ch3 edited and ch4 nearly finished

This could probably do with its own thread. However:


I have to say that you have some interesting ideas, but I don't like it.
The style clashes with itself (which may be on purpose, but it feels like bad storytelling to me), punctuation and capitalization feel inconsistent, and like FowlJ said: Use. Dialogue.
I've noticed several sentences in the sections written in paragraph form that just don't flow well.
The character writing feels...off to me as well. It could just be the style, but the characters don't seem to fit with their established personalities.

I don't claim to write well, and even if I could, that wouldn't make me a good critic, but take it into consideration for the future.

Also, to everyone: If you haven't already, please take a moment and check out some of the short stories I've written. They're not perfect, by any means, but they were fun to write.

[SkaianRedeemer]

This could probably do with its own thread.

It has its own thread!

[Romanji]

It has its own thread!

Indeed it does, where did that come from?

I have to say

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that you have some interesting ideas, but I don't like it.
The style clashes with itself (which may be on purpose, but it feels like bad storytelling to me), punctuation and capitalization feel inconsistent, and like FowlJ said: Use. Dialogue.
I've noticed several sentences in the sections written in paragraph form that just don't flow well.
The character writing feels...off to me as well. It could just be the style, but the characters don't seem to fit with their established personalities.

I don't claim to write well, and even if I could, that wouldn't make me a good critic, but take it into consideration for the future.

Also, to everyone: If you haven't already, please take a moment and check out some of the short stories I've written. They're not perfect, by any means, but they were fun to write.

The story will evolve, as do the characters. Where the story moves from being canon to head canon. If you haven't paid much attention to the narration as well as quirk appearance and "sillyness" in dialogue its appearing much less as the story continues.

EDIT: Neon, do you post pages of NIGHTFALL on tumblr?

[TheNeonWerewolf]

...EDIT: Neon, do you post pages of NIGHTFALL on tumblr?

I have a tumblr account, I just don't use it a lot(at least not as much as DeviantART). I simply find tumblr disorganized and confusing, and I really only use it to monitor other Homestuck blogs.

I have posted a few pages on DeviantART however. Maybe I should post a few Nightfall pages on tumblr as well... a majority of the Homestuck fandom seems to hide there.

Here is my tumblr:theneonwerewolf.tumblr.com

[TheNeonWerewolf]

>Be Liz.






You are now Liz. You are enjoying the afternoon by watching reruns of one of your other favorite TV shows. It is about five awesome teenage superheroes who fight for truth, justice, and pizza. You are just finishing up this episode, which you have seen a million times already.

Your brother is at his job, and he should be back sometime soon with dinner.

This episode is over, and you are done watching TV. What are you going to do next?


>Liz: Examine photo on the wall.

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>Liz: Examine photo on the wall.






You look at the picture of your family. Or at least, what it used to look like. Last year, your parents died in a car accident, and ever since then, your older brother has been taking care of both of you. He was never quite the same after your parents died.


>Liz: Enter bedroom.

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Yeah, not really an amazing update considering the time it took. I had to design the living room in her house, and that takes a while, and it isn't my favorite thing to do. Ugh, I still have to make her room.

[Dastardly bananas]

Teen Titans! Yes. Wait, her parents are dead? Aww. And her brother is taking care of her? Blech.

I'm glad we get to see more of Liz.

[Anti-Riku]

Lol does this show happen to be Teen Titans?

[TheNeonWerewolf]

Lol does this show happen to be Teen Titans?

Yep!

[Rudolph]

Gotta be tough on her older brother, raising her all by himself.

[Romanji]

Her story, even if its the tip of the ice burg it me where it counts x_x
And thats on top of kids bullying her in school...
>Feelsbadman...

[Aloice]

Ahh Neon, I just looked through your deviantart gallery and I must say I wish I knew you had been the artist earlier. Great work!