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[canidaeVulpecula]

ohmaniwasntexpectingaresponseatthishour

So, thicken the outline around the dyed bits? And Ill try moving the horns around a bit and fix the belt. Thanks

[Cipher]

O.O Wow. Well done! Everything looks wonderful. Ash hit all the points that need looked at too. It's all very unique.

[canidaeVulpecula]

Thank you! :'D Now I just have to shorten it by about 3 paragraphs and throw it in the trollslum

[OrangeAipom]

edit: also 'Firewisp' is her ancestors name, but she doesnt know about her. I figure maybe she heard the name around at some point and was like 'thats a pretty awesome name.' Ive heard Terezi doesnt know about her ancestor, yet her flarp name is Redglare so... passable? Maybe?

Vriska knows about Terezi's ancestor, so she could've suggested the name to Terezi.

[NightGolem]

This is my first honest to God try at making a homestuck troll. It wasn't until after I made his design that I found out the symbol on the first didn't have to be a zodiac sign.. His original image[unlike the sprite for this profile] would be a lot harder to edit so if I don't have to I would prefer to not need to change it[the sign not the profile]. Is there anything I should change? Something I forgot?

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>-Be the harvester__)

You are now the harvester. Your name is OKRASK DIANIN and you have TROPICAL GREEN BLOOD. Blood color doesn't seem all that important to you though of course you still acknowledge it's importance in culture. You are almost eight sweeps old and enjoy growing and harvesting plants. Actually, you have a SCYTHE you use for HARVESTING. While there are better and more modern tools to harvest with, you just love the old fashion harvesting tool. It doubles for being a great weapon, can never be too careful with who you run in friends, beasts, or otherwise. You love your scythe since it is decorated with a PUMPKIN THEME. Its not really a pumpkin vine, but it does make you feel CLOSER to your plants. Besides your love for your large sharp object and plants you enjoy LEARNING and READING. You don't really roleplay, it never seemed fun to you and still doesn't. Really, it seems more like an excuse to hurt each other for fun. See no missing eyes or limbs? Exactly.

Your Lucus is a Pursnake, which is a large and White, dove winged serpent. Yours has BROWN EYES and enjoys your garden. It tends to eat ANYTHING BESIDES YOU THAT MOVES when its hungry, thankfully it doesn't get hungry all that often. Sometimes though your lucus flies off for LONG PERIODS OF TIME. By now you have gotten used to it, but you still sometimes try to follow it to find out what he is doing while he is gone. You have yet to manage to follow him that far. Your trolltag is darkHarvester and )ike to type )ike this when typing__) Symbolism can be fun to learn about, but so can different ways to kill people. Oops! You didn't say that, because you are a calm person. Well, it is good to know different ways to kill people though, you never know when it might come in handy anyway. You would prefer to avoid violence but know that its not really something that can be avoided and never hesitate when attacking. Actually, maybe you should hesitate a bit more, but oh well. You try to keep on your toes as much as you can with your intelligence and lack of hesitation.

You enjoy fashion a little, but you don't care a LOT. You only care enough to make your clothing as comfortable as possible, and t shirts just aren't all that comfortable to you. You love your belt, its the only thing you wear that isn't black. One could call you a hermit but that's not true, you just haven't met anyone you feel you can trust yet. Your caution and lack of trust for anyone but your lucus might be because you live in a fielded area and have no real close neighbors. Without anyone near by your left with the choice to walk a few days to try to find someone else or just you your husktop to talk online to others. You have online friends but you haven't met any of them in real life though so you don't really count them. You sometimes get in STRANGE MOODS when left by yourself to long and end up doing things out of character to try to entertain yourself or perhaps to imagine others around you. After those moods end though you are always left to wonder why you acted so insane.

[Thunder Reign]

This is my first honest to God try at making a homestuck troll. It wasn't until after I made his design that I found out the symbol on the first didn't have to be a zodiac sign.. His original image[unlike the sprite for this profile] would be a lot harder to edit so if I don't have to I would prefer to not need to change it[the sign not the profile]. Is there anything I should change? Something I forgot?

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>-Be the harvester__)

You are now the harvester. Your name is OKRASK DIANIN and you have TROPICAL GREEN BLOOD. Blood color doesn't seem all that important to you though of course you still acknowledge it's importance in culture. You are almost eight sweeps old and enjoy growing and harvesting plants. Actually, you have a SCYTHE you use for HARVESTING. While there are better and more modern tools to harvest with, you just love the old fashion harvesting tool. It doubles for being a great weapon, can never be too careful with who you run in friends, beasts, or otherwise. You love your scythe since it is decorated with a PUMPKIN THEME. Its not really a pumpkin vine, but it does make you feel CLOSER to your plants. Besides your love for your large sharp object and plants you enjoy LEARNING and READING. You don't really roleplay, it never seemed fun to you and still doesn't. Really, it seems more like an excuse to hurt each other for fun. See no missing eyes or limbs? Exactly.

Your Lucus is a Pursnake, which is a large and White, dove winged serpent. Yours has BROWN EYES and enjoys your garden. It tends to eat ANYTHING BESIDES YOU THAT MOVES when its hungry, thankfully it doesn't get hungry all that often. Sometimes though your lucus flies off for LONG PERIODS OF TIME. By now you have gotten used to it, but you still sometimes try to follow it to find out what he is doing while he is gone. You have yet to manage to follow him that far. Your trolltag is darkHarvester and )ike to type )ike this when typing__) Symbolism can be fun to learn about, but so can different ways to kill people. Oops! You didn't say that, because you are a calm person. Well, it is good to know different ways to kill people though, you never know when it might come in handy anyway. You would prefer to avoid violence but know that its not really something that can be avoided and never hesitate when attacking. Actually, maybe you should hesitate a bit more, but oh well. You try to keep on your toes as much as you can with your intelligence and lack of hesitation.

You enjoy fashion a little, but you don't care a LOT. You only care enough to make your clothing as comfortable as possible, and t shirts just aren't all that comfortable to you. You love your belt, its the only thing you wear that isn't black. One could call you a hermit but that's not true, you just haven't met anyone you feel you can trust yet. Your caution and lack of trust for anyone but your lucus might be because you live in a fielded area and have no real close neighbors. Without anyone near by your left with the choice to walk a few days to try to find someone else or just you your husktop to talk online to others. You have online friends but you haven't met any of them in real life though so you don't really count them. You sometimes get in STRANGE MOODS when left by yourself to long and end up doing things out of character to try to entertain yourself or perhaps to imagine others around you. After those moods end though you are always left to wonder why you acted so insane.

Nnnnno, you really need to change the symbol. The Virgo sign is exclusive to jadebloods, more specifically Kanaya, and fantrolls with zodiac symbols are looked down on.

[OrangeAipom]

Nnnnno, you really need to change the symbol. The Virgo sign is exclusive to jadebloods, more specifically Kanaya, and fantrolls with zodiac symbols are looked down on.

It wasn't until after I made his design that I found out the symbol on the first didn't have to be a zodiac sign..

huh?

[NightGolem]

Thunder Reign - Alright, I'll try to find an unused symbol then..

OrangeAipom - I didn't know then. If you want the full explanation, until I looked up the colors code on GIMP I thought the jadeblood color was a yellowish green as that is the color I always represented with the color jade(its the color my color pencils list a greyish yellowish green as).

[OrangeAipom]

i don't understand why jade bloods are emerald colored either. :U

[NightGolem]

OrangeAipom - It doesn't matter, though someone I know showed me a blood color char for trolls so I changed my characters blood color since it wasn't on there. I don't think I'll change his symbol though since it seems to make more sense that it would go with blood color to me as opposed to each troll having their own unique symbol. I don't understand the unique symbol for each and every troll thing, and if I don't know the reason for something, I generally prefer not to do it. If there is a reason, I do it.

[Sandvich King]

But almost every troll DOES have a unique sign, as confirmed here.

AG: A sign is an insignia we must wear, specific to our class. Each class has a huge alpha8et of signs, so when someone shares yours, you know you have a lot in common. I was so excited to see it.

Unless your troll IS Kanaya or the Dolorosa, the virgo symbol won't work.

[NightGolem]

Now that is a reason and now the unique symbols make sense, so I will change it.

[Thunder Reign]

that is the exact same thing I said, jesus.
regardless, the new symbol looks fine. you're more or less set to go.

[OrangeAipom]

that is the exact same thing I said, jesus.

cite your sources next time? :U

[NightGolem]

Thunder Reign - You said that it was exclusively for her and fantrolls with zodiac signs are frowned on, but you didn't say why. Without saying the why or reason it wasn't saying the same thing. That's why I didn't understand. I don't need the source cited, I just needed to know why. In any case thank you.

[Mooeena]

You might want to change your avatar now, though...

[NightGolem]

Whoops, there we go XD

[Taurus]

I hope someone could answer a few questions?

1. When it comes to trolls having powers, is there any particular rule to that? Do only certain bloodtypes have powers at all?
2. How does one come up with a sign? Is that basically a free for all?
3. When it comes to trolls not caring for fashion...does that just mean they wear one particular outfit ever? All of the canon trolls have a different style of dress, so do they just pick one thing and pretty much wear that forever?

[BewareOfNerd]

1. Lowbloods are more likely to get psychic powers. Anything higher than lime will probably get some dirty looks from fellow fantrollers.
2. It's best to pick a symbol that has something to do with your troll. This is a good website to pick from.
3. They probably don't just have one outfit ever; they just don't have a hundred super elaborate outfits.

[Thunder Reign]

cite your sources next time? :U

it was explicitly stated in canon. i wouldn't cite something that wasn't canon.

1. When it comes to trolls having powers, is there any particular rule to that? Do only certain bloodtypes have powers at all?
2. How does one come up with a sign? Is that basically a free for all?
3. When it comes to trolls not caring for fashion...does that just mean they wear one particular outfit ever? All of the canon trolls have a different style of dress, so do they just pick one thing and pretty much wear that forever?

1. Trolls don't have a set range of powers, but you have to take into account character balance. It's shown that mostly only lowbloods have psychic powers, with the exception of Vriska (a freak, Hussie said as much himself) and Gamzee (but subjugglators are an enormous tin of worms). You can give your troll whatever power you want, but try to avoid extreme physical mutations such as shapeshifting or wings, since that would probably get your troll culled. Anything above Nepeta blood color is starting to push it for psychic powers.
2. It's a total free for all. Some signs are overdone (planet signs), but you really can use anything you want (except zodiac symbols, as this page has proven). Some people like to pick symbols that are relevant to some aspect of their character.
3. Trolls largely favor the utilitarian, so it's likely that most of them just wear the outfit that they find most casual/practical and only make changes when the environment calls for it.

[Taurus]

Thanks!

//Edit: I had an idea for a blueblood to have the power of...vision, is the best way to describe it. Meaning, he could look into a reflective surface and out into another (say he was in his hive and looked into a mirror, he could be looking into another hive if there was a mirror located there). Would that be plausible?

[Pandemonius]

Not for a blueblood. And even if he were lower on the spectrum, I think it could use some tweaking; it seems weirdly specific compared to the canon powers.

[Taurus]

Okay, thanks! That answers my questions~

[nonstopSmiles]

Your name is HYSEIN SENNIC and you are an aspiring doctor or at least you would be if you were any good at keeping your patients ALIVE. People have stopped volunteering to be your practice patients due to the body count you've racked up. But that doesn't stop from acquiring one or two subjects. Though the only thing you've really been successful in is EXTRACTING body parts and reattaching them in different places, though this skill proves to be quite useless as the parts don't do anything.

When you're not playing 'Dr. Frankenstein' you are playing the stimulating APOCALYPTIC video games. But other than that and a chat program known as 'Trollian' you really are COMPUTER ILLITERATE. People are shocked that you can't even preform the simplest of tasks like find the 'Esc' button.

Another hobby you have consists of your head in the books. MEDICAL BOOKS are your preference as you find new things to 'experiment' on your future subjects. Aside from those books you also have a large number of DIARIES scattered around your hive containing your medical findings and experiments.

At first glance you can come off to be quite CHARMING. But in reality you only use this skill to manipulate those around you.

You have an odd habit of eavesdropping on others conversations, not because you're nosy, you just do it for the fun of it. Hearing others problems and complaints gives you a strange satisfaction.

Though most people sharing your high intelligence would not particularly enjoy the company of people who are 'INTELLIGENT ILLITERATE', you find it quite amusing. Being around those with lower intellect makes you feel a tad bit smarter.

Your LUSUS unfortunately is no longer among the living due to being your very first test subject. Being the genius that you are, you preformed your first experiment when you were only 4 sweeps old. Unfortunately that also means that you lost your lusus before it taught you some imperative fighting skills. You still know enough to hold you own in a fight, but it wouldn't be wise to go around looking for any either.

You use two strife specibus cards. One is SCALPELKIND and the other is SYRINGEKIND, and you just alternate between the two depending on your mood.

Your fetch modus is set to PRESCRIPTION mode which quite simple; you just write up a prescription for the item you require.

Your troll tag is infectiousRemedies and you Talk !n a way that seems constantly fasc!nated.

I'm not sure whether he is fine, I hope I didn't make him ridiculous.

[Mooeena]

Why did he attach a fin to himself?